maggie+new+one+edit+story


 * Maggie, **
 * I am wondering what you mean when you say: My family know????? Also, you may be using the word "only" incorrectly, perhaps you mean "always" as the sign is similar. Look at my questions which are in (parentheses) and see if you can make some changes. **
 * Who I Am **
 * My name is Maggie Canelli. My favorite sport is basketball. I am good at math and I enjoy playing video games. I have loved all animals since I was small. I always play basketball outside with my friends . I have little cousins that i love. My little cousin with me played video game together which is fun. I also have a cousin my age who I love to play with. I love all of my family. In my family, I am the only one in my family with long curls. My family call me sweet and i like kidding my family. My cousin call me funny person. My **
 * family sometime love me but they know that I am a piece (do you mean peaceful?) bad (who is bad?) person because not let **
 * fight (who?) get hurt. If play fight that fine that is make fun. (That?) I am enjoy ways chill my cousin play with me going to **
 * pool have great time. I like this family fun things. My family and I are enjoy and talk quiet. (no loud talking?) **
 * when it comes to...... **
 * When it comes to being a Basketball player I am best at defense. I have liked basketball from age 6 to 15 years old. I was learn play basketball when i was young. I was older still play basketball because I love basketball that sometime easy play. I want basketball player later also coach team because i know how doing basketball team work together. I want coach basketball's girls team because i am good know how doing play game basketball. I know my feel love play basketball because i am good player. **
 * Edit story 6.6 **

My name is Maggie Canelli. My favorite sport is basketball. When it comes to being a Basketball player I am best at defense. I have always liked basketball from age 6 to 15 years old. I was learning how to play basketball when I was young. As still for today, I'm much older and still play basketball because I love basketball sometime it is easy to play. I want to be a basketball player. In the future, I want to coach a team because I know how to play basketball with teamwork. I want to coach a basketball's girls team because I am good at playing the game. I am good at math and I enjoy playings video games. I loved all animals since I was young. I always play basketball outside with my friends. I have a little cousins that I love. Me and my little cousin played video game together which is fun. I also have a cousin my age who I love to play with. I love all of my family. In my family, I am the only one in my family with long curls. My families call me sweet and I like kidding my family. My cousins call me a funny person. I sometimes feel like my family love me but sometimes they leave me out with all their talking. I wish they would talk little louder because I want to feel included. I have a bad temper and occasionally I play too much and too hard. I feel sorry for that. Play fighting is fine but I don’t mean to hurt my brother, sister and cousins. I enjoy chilling with my cousin at her pool and hot tub and we have great time. I like this family it is fun.